Similar to wrong word choice, wrong phrasing refers to a mismatch of words at phrasal levels.
“In the vicinity of place X” means “near place X”. In example 1, “in the vicinity” is wrong because the writer does not mention “in the vicinity of  WHERE”.
 
In example 2, “which is about” does not convey the meaning of “causing something to exist” needed here.
 
In example 3, “solutions” cannot “cope with” “problems”. Only people can cope with problems. “Solutions” solve/ address “problems”.
 
In example 4, only water can be “polluted”. Water quality is “affected”.
 
In example 5, the phrase “in every whole day” does not exist in English. You can say “every day”, “the entire day”, etc.
 
In example 6, the noun phrase “could have the improvement” does not make sense in English. One can opt for a much simpler way of saying this by using the verb “improve”.
 
In example 7, the verb “cause” should be followed by a non-finite verb phrase with the verb in the infinitive form (something, such as “pollution”, causes something else to happen, such as “rare species face extinction”).
 
In example 8, “in spite of”, similar to “although”, indicates concession (i.e. it expresses an idea that suggests the opposite of the main part of the sentence.). Here, the relationship between “poor urban planning” and “pollution” is not contrast. It is just a different problem.
 
In example 9, the adverb “hardly” means “rarely”. We can use “make” in the following way: Make it hard for someone (e.g. “the general public”) to do something (e.g. “to utilize the harbour”). 
 
In example 10, the phrase “the rate of pollution” does not make sense in English. One can opt for a much simpler way of saying this by using the verb “speed up”.

 

 

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RIGHT

1.

Hence, traffic congestion may become another serious problem either in the vicinity or along the seacoast.

Hence, traffic congestion may become another serious problem either in the district or along the seacoast.

2.

Vancouver’s advantage is the availability for development of brilliantly located waterfront areas which is about a genuine social mix.

Vancouver’s advantage is the availability for development of brilliantly located waterfront areas which gives rise to a genuine social mix.

3.

The purpose of this report is to analyze the causes and consequences that are brought by the three major problems in order to find optimum solutions to cope with these problems.

The purpose of this report is to analyze the causes and consequences that are brought by the three major problems in order to find optimum solutions to these problems.

 

The purpose of this report is to analyze the causes and consequences that are brought by the three major problems in order to cope with these problems.

4.

On the other hand, the quality of water in both harbours are being polluted.

On the other hand, the quality of water in both harbours is being affected.

5.

They could have more chances to practice sports or outdoor activities there and not just work and work in every whole day.

They could have more chances to practice sports or outdoor activities there and not just work and work all the time.

6.

So, the problem of air pollution could have the improvement.

So, the problem of air pollution could be improved.

7.

This pollution affects the living organisms’ health and causes the rare species facing extinction.

This pollution affects the living organisms’ health and causes rare species to extinct/ to face extinction.

8.

In spite of pollution, poor urban planning is another problem in Hong Kong.

Apart from pollution, poor urban planning is another problem in Hong Kong.

9.

This poor urban design makes the general public hardly utilize the harbour.

This poor urban design makes it hard for the general public to utilize the harbour.

10.

With the Central and Wan Chai reclamations, the
rate of pollution becomes faster
.

The Central and Wan Chai reclamations speed up pollution.

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